Voluminous task. Can't be done in one sitting & better appreciated in parts.
The document has touched on one aspect of job. Issues pertaining placing people on rolls is not addressed: Regularisaton/Absorption Influence, Corruption, Nepotism, political interference, Choice candidates, students being favored by employees etc. The ways for basic needs, support etc should be as easy (& transaperent, accountable); but jobs be given only in one way irrespective of who, level etc across India.
Next, equality in all aspects & nill preferences on uncontrollable factors need be incorporated aptly.
The document has not defined 'Democracy'.
Self sustainibility need be the hall mark of the Gvt. The system should generate money on ingenuity, labor etc & not by formulating bills that denude forests (even trees), water bodies, mountains or defines creature as proteins, vitamins, carbohydrates, fats etc & work up science to enable that definition. There be clear definition on a series of things & the topmost being: Wealth, job, food, happiness. The percepts in Article 48 & 48 A in Constituion-I be worked up in greater details.